Editing My New Fantasy Book

I’ve been busy editing/rewriting the first draft of my new fantasy book. I asked someone to read through the whole story and give me feedback which was really helpful as it was great to have someone else’s perspective on the book. The only trouble with the editing is that I find I end up second guessing myself too much if I’m not careful. It’s tough finding a happy balance between making improvements and getting carried away and changing things for the worse.

The other problem is I keep thinking of new things and extra details I want to include in the story but I think it’s finally getting to the finished stage. So now I can start concentrating on writing the second book in the series and then I will make final alterations to this one later.

Although l also need to proofread, typeset and think of a name for book 1 of the series I’ve now got a really good idea of what to do for the cover so it’s starting to all come together into the finished article which is exciting. Thinking of a title is probably my biggest hurdle at the moment but I am hoping if I focus on writing the second book maybe ideas for titles of both books might just come to me. If not I will have to sit down and have a really big brainstorm.

The Magic Key - 2

Continuation of posts 10 Minute Madness Experiment and The Magic Key - 1

‘It’s obvious it’s old. You know no more than I do so just admit that instead of speculating the obvious.’

‘I was only trying to help,’ he answered, hurt by his older sisters comments.

‘Well I’d really appreciate help searching this place if you two don’t mind.’

‘Of course not,’ Sheila said, ‘I think we’d both like to know what it opens.’

‘Divide and conquer I say.’ Jeff jumped up. ‘I’ll take downstairs.

Slowly the three began searching every item and door in the house looking for anything with a keyhole and excluding each item in turn when the key refused to even insert into most let alone turn. After several hours of searching and with every nook and cranny checked to no avail Jeff threw himself down on the couch exhausted. ‘This is hopeless,’ he complained to the other two who had re-joined him in the living room after their own fruitless exploration. ‘We’re never going to find it. Mat are you sure dad didn’t give you some item, maybe years ago.’

‘No nothing.’ Mat thought back still unable to remember any item his uncle had given him with a lock.

‘Well that just leaves the gardens and outbuildings.’ Sheila stated less willing to give up so easily than her brother. ‘Come on.’

‘At least let a chap have some lunch first.’ Jeff protested.

‘You stay if you want but I want to find out.’

‘Oh all right.’ Jeff pulled himself off of the couch with effort. ‘This had better be worth missing lunch for.’

New Author Page

I decided it was a good idea to create an author page at Amazon, something I had been putting off doing because of a fear of the unknown combined with being unsure what information to provide about myself. I shouldn’t have worried though as the whole process couldn’t have been simpler or easier to do and I’m now wondering why I didn’t do it sooner.
You can view the page at http://www.amazon.co.uk/-/e/B00UL83P4O

What I’m Currently Working On

The first book I wrote was a science fiction although people have told me since it’s a mystery as well as it kept them in suspense as to what would happen next and how the story would end. I love the genres of science fiction and fantasy equally though and whilst I have more ideas for science fiction books I decided I would work on a fantasy next. In fact it will be book 1 of at least a 2 book fantasy series as I had too much storyline I wanted write to make it just a single book.

Although some may say the genres are fairly close I’m noticing the significant differences. With the fantasy it can be quite challenging to try and make a fantasy world and events that can’t possibly happen seem real. It’s nice though being able to let my imagination run wild and dream up whatever I like although I still have the boundaries I’ve set myself of trying to make it seem real.

I’ve finished the first draft of the first book and now I’ve just started the process of going through re-writing vast amounts and refining other parts so it will be a while yet before it’s finished. Also I’ve never attempted writing a series before and my inclination is to start writing book 2 before publishing this one. I know from experience I find, although I have a storyline planned, I will stumble across ways I feel I can improve it during writing which leaves me having to alter earlier events to match with the new events that unfold later. That would definitely cause me problems if I had already published the first book and therefore could no longer change it.

I’m also getting to the point where I need to start thinking about a cover and title for the book which I have to admit I’m a bit baffled about. I do have a vague idea of how I want the cover to look but I think choosing a title that hasn’t already been used by either a film or book is one of the most difficult aspects of writing. Also it is tough finding a name that suitably reflects the contents of the book and portrays the right image for it. I’m still not sure the title of my previous book is the most suitable but there were too many things already titled want I wanted to originally call it so I ended up with about my 20th choice.

Photography

I decided to try and improve my photography skills to help when I’m trying to put together covers for books or take pictures of my woodturning so I joined a local camera club. They have monthly competitions which I’ve only entered a couple of times and won a bronze and special award. I entered again last night in one where the subject was flowers and couldn’t believe it when I actually won gold.

Technology Themed Short Story

It’s great being able to talk to people with the same passion I have for writing and so I decided to attend the writers group again but that meant I had to complete what they refer to as the ‘homework’. A short story, approximately 1200 words in length in relation to the subject or theme they set. This time it could be a story about anything provided it contained the words ‘memory stick’, ‘mobile phone’ and ‘tablet’, which as someone pointed is basically a technology themed story.

The problem I have is I’ve never been any good at short stories. I start writing and no matter how good my intentions are to keep it short the storyline just runs away with me becoming more complex by the second until I reach a point where I have to turn it into a novella or novel in order to give it a proper ending. I wanted to show willing though so I decided to try my best and give it as much of an ending as I could but I still feel I could continue it on to reach a better ending. I have other ideas for stories I’m currently working on or want to do but once I’ve completed those I might revisit this one and expand on it.

I thought I’d post my efforts here. I’m busy with my new novel and didn’t have the time to invest in writing the ‘homework’ so once again it is an unedited first draft and written in a bit of a rush.

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Dale drummed his fingers impatiently on the desk as he waited for the files to finish transferring to the memory stick. All the while he remained alert for sounds of anyone approaching the room. It was taking longer than he had thought it would and every second increased the risk of his discovery. He couldn’t let that happen, too much was at stake. He was the only one who could expose what was really going on. He knew no one else at the company had the guts or were prepared to risk the penalties for stealing files even though they had all seen the same results he had and knew the inevitable outcome if someone didn’t stop it.

As the progress bar continued migrating slowly across the screen Dale rechecked the results on his tablet to reassure himself he was doing the right thing. There was no mistaking it; the company had made an error in the programming, an error that caused the code to deviate more each cycle from its original lines of code. A never ending loop that would result in the programming becoming so corrupted there was no telling what would happen. The deviation each cycle was so minuscule it wouldn’t happen straight away, maybe not even for many years but gradually it would become more and more noticeable and eventually dangerous.

So many robots had already been sold with the software though that the last thing the company wanted was to have to recall them all. If it didn’t send the company bust overnight then it would definitely impact their reputation. They probably figured by the time people saw the robots acting bizarrely they would have made their fortune and be long gone. They didn’t seem to realise or want to admit the robots could become dangerous, depending on how the code deviated. It was such a small error after all and most of the robots were still functioning normally. It was only luck that they had even found the problem after one of the robots had been returned faulty. For some reason in that particular robot the error had deviated faster each cycle, a circumstance they still couldn’t explain, which resulted in it accidentally knocking its owner unconscious when handing her a drink. That had happened already and things could only get worse, that’s why he had to let people know and for that he needed proof.

The files had nearly downloaded when he heard footsteps in the corridor outside the room. He still worked for the company and had clearance to be in the room but that very morning he’d had such a ruckus with his boss over recalling the robots that his boss had put him on forced leave.  No doubt all his work colleagues would have heard about it by now and whoever it was approaching the door would be bound to question his reasons for working alone, late at night.

The computer beeped signalling the files had downloaded and he hastily retrieved the stick and shut the computer.  The screen blinked off as the sound of footsteps grew louder and he waited with abated breath hoping they would pass him by. He felt the vibration before he heard it as his mobile phone began to ring. He desperately fumbled in his pocket trying to turn it off but it was too late. The office door swung open and a man in his late 40’s entered.

‘Dale! What are you doing here?’ He tried to stay calm, hoping the guard wouldn’t notice his panic or distressed state.

‘I just had to tidy up some files to make it a bit easier for whoever takes over while I’m away.’ He gave a half laugh that turned into more of a nervous chortle. The guard eyed him suspiciously and he knew at once his nervous behaviour was the cause. He forced himself to project a calmer manner as he continued on. ‘Guess you heard about my trouble with the boss earlier? Thought it best to keep out his way for a bit so figured it was better to pop in after he’d gone home.'

The guard laughed, relaxing slightly. ‘I think the whole staff heard about that argument. Apparently he was actually shaking after you left him and his face was bright red. His secretary’s been telling everyone. I’m surprised he didn’t fire you then and there.’

‘So am I to be honest.’ Dale forced a laugh.

‘I think you’ve got the right idea keeping out his way, at least until the dust has settled.’

‘Well I’ve finished here and I’m on vacation now for 3 weeks so that shouldn’t be a problem.’ He felt beads of sweat beginning to form on his brow and hoped the guard wouldn’t notice. He had the advantage the lights in the office were turned off and the only light that filtered in came from the corridor.

‘Enjoy yourself and think of us poor souls still slaving away here.’

‘I will.’ Dale smiled, casually picking up his bag containing the memory stick and taking his leave before the guard could change his mind. He had reached the office door when the guard called after him to hold up. He froze, fearing something had happened to give him away.

‘I’ve got a little boy at home who is mad on those robots you make. If you get any discounts for them you couldn’t by any chance send one my way could you?’ Dale exhaled softly, trying to conceal his relief.

‘Yeah sure. We get various staff discounts from time to time.’

‘That’s great. Thanks mate I owe you one.’

‘No worries.’ He smiled and left, feeling sorry for the guard. Once he exposed the data to the world it wouldn’t take the company long to find out he was the one who had stolen it and from there work out who was on duty at the time.  The chances were that the guard would lose his job or at the very least get a severe reprimand but he’d gone too far to turn back now. And more was at stake than one man’s job.

Relief washed over him as he finally exited the building and got into his car. He pulled out his laptop and the memory stick. It wouldn’t take him long now to upload the entire contents to the Internet and once there the company would find it impossible to cover up or to refute such hard facts. They would have no choice but to recall all their products. He of course would lose his job but that would be a small price to pay considering the potential disaster he would have averted. The file finished uploading and he smiled pleased, knowing he had succeeded.

There was only one thing that kept niggling at him slightly, disturbing his triumph. What had caused the deviation each cycle in the code and why had that one robot’s code altered so much faster than any of the others? They knew it had to be an error in the programming but no one had been able to find the exact lines of code causing it and that bothered him. Something just didn’t feel right.